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22:13 2008-3-7

Friday March 7th.2008 warm

The weather has became warm,and the horrible and cold winter has been far away from us.It must be the coldest winter I have ever come across,I really do hope it would never come back .

Although the cold weather has been left,but my studing go on none the less.

Today maybe a bad day for somebody,as it is the day that our achievement of the simulant examination is coming out,however,for me,today,it was an indeed changeling,on the one hand,I was rather fear about the achievement,on the another hand,I still want to know my achievement hopefully.

Finally,I know all of my achievement,which would be a sad memory spring into my mind,I was indeed down,not only the achievement,but also it would indeed disappoint my techers severely ,who support me greatly.However,what I want to say isn's sorry,I assure that I must do well in next time,please believe me again,in this month I waste too much time playing games and doing other things .Now,i have given up these my bad habits ,what's more,i have made myself schedule,i must cultivate myself in the nature of industry,it will give me a lot help,i have took note earnestly,i expect everyone just believe me again.

now,i am burning ,i believe i can understand it ,yes,i can do it.

真的不得不说看你日记好累哦,又不是写中文,你一个意思用不同的词汇来表示,说明你有文采,英语一直一个意思（相信我,给我个机会）,就有一直繁琐,好啰嗦的感觉,一个意思最好还是用不同的词,简单明了表示就好了.

其他回答

用is becoming warm 比较好

disappear forever. 这段断下句比较好。

although 后不加but.后面句话也不通。although the cold weather has been left,my study will go on with no less.

maybe today is...

哦。我。。。就看到着吧。。。 = = ...

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so beautiful->beautiful

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has a good day-> have a good day

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注意过去时态的用法,不要动不动就was did

注意标点用法,不必要的逗号不要用.

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总体来说楼主写的很不错~用了许多高级词汇~因为是自学的原因~大概对语法容易出现一些小漏洞~并且中国英语（Chinglish）的现象比较严重~

我按序号一个一个说原因~

1.shopping一般和go连用~而非go to shopping

并且,same一般和the连用

2.原句缺少谓语~也就是少了个 is 改完以后会更地道一些,原句有点直译了~一看就是中国人写的~另外中国省份中间不需要空格~

3.山西人不是直译成Shanxi people,而要说来自山西

4.还是go to shopping的错误~这里不用to,而且注意动词单复数（原句中的give）

5.阅读一般用read see多表示“看见”

news作“新闻”讲 是不可数名词~前面不能用 a

6.改了以后比较符合英语习惯

7.there是不能作主语的~所以表示天气就用it~

very也不能用在比较级的前面~

8.又有些中式英语了~wet在这里可以直接作动词~意为“使...湿”

9.look after是照顾照料~后面直接跟人就可以了~一般不用照顾健康···

prevention是名词~原句不符合语法~无谓语~改制后就是动词+宾语了~

楼主能自学英语~本身勇气可嘉~而且敢于把自己的日记拿出来让别人修改~我很佩服楼主的勇气和决心~所以帮你细细地看了一遍~有几处小改动没有括号出来~楼主可以对比着看一看~

建议楼主练习一下连接词的使用~这篇日记感觉and用的太多~没有层次感~并且and多了会造成歧义~所以不妨积累一些连词~比如but 、however等